You say Laptop, people think laptop. ie something that isn't handheld or pocketable.
Sure they try to explain in different spots that it is pocketable, but now you just have confusion. Out of all the options to call it , laptop shouldn't be one of them. Especially when you are trying to get the message across that it's not what a laptop is, ie not pocketable
And yes, if you start a crowd funding campaign, with no prototype, and no video. The campaign text needs to be outstanding as you are already way behind the eight ball. No prototype means it will put off a lot of people. No video, makes it look like a fly by night operation - personally I don't trust campaigns which don't show a video and show the people behind it. Then to top that all off, you have the grammar and English which is bad, in some places humorously bad. Add that to the other two points , and it's not good.